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    Some Astronomical Poetry

    I'm going to have to recite this poem 6:00 tonight in front of a live audience. I'm really really really really really nervous.

    Then I'll be staying on campus at the library all night long to study for my final exam in Chinese. I'm still nervous.

    This poem is open to later revision, I just wrote it so it's a little too fresh to be "done".

    If you want to share your own poetry in this thread, that's fine by me. This is not just "my" thread.

    Origins

    All is quiet
    There is nothing
    There is no time
    There is no sound
    There is no light

    Then the surge comes
    A tidal wave of energy
    A wave of time
    The cosmic ocean empties itself
    Into the void

    Time passes...

    Hydrogen and Helium
    The basic building blocks
    Matter converges
    Matter convulses
    Matter ignites

    The stars are born
    The stars will die

    Fire and water and earth and air
    Ice and rock and all that is primal
    Yellow, Crimson, and Turquoise dancers
    Circling and colliding in grace and beauty
    With no one alive to see it

    Gas begat flame
    Flame begat earth
    Earth begat life
    The universe keeps on moving
    The Milky Way keeps on spinning

    The waters of the cosmic ocean
    Boil and bubble and burst
    The waters of Earth's ocean
    Floods and forms and turns
    Life begins within its depths

    It changes, forms, devours and breeds
    Legs and lungs emerge
    And life crawls out of its pit
    Looks to the sky
    Sees the light of distant ancestors

    It thinks:
    I am home
    Last edited by SolusLupus; 2009-Dec-15 at 01:47 AM.

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    I like it

    As a corporate trainer who stands in front of people for 40 hours a week, I'm trying to think of some pearls of wisdom to help you tonight... but I can't think of much LOL

    Except to say that they are there to listen to YOU. This is your chance to shine. Give them something to talk about. Maybe I'm just an attention seeker in general, but I tend to think that this is one time when people actually listen to me LOL So I try to make it as interesting for them as I can.

    So don't worry about anything else. Allow yourself to be immersed in the moment, to enjoy it for what it is - your chance to inspire and to BE inspired by the whole experience

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    Huh.

    That's surprisingly good advice, actually.

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    Forgot to say... GOOD LUCK!!!

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    How did it go?

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    It's 3:45 PM right now (Central). It hasn't even happened yet.

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    That was just in advance. I need to check the dates more often. Cholesterol.

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    That's a great poem. I do some poetry, but it's not that good...

    Spinning

    I stood at the edge of my lawn.
    Near the evergreens, by the fence.
    A few clouds floated on the horizon.

    The gibbous moon hung
    In the darkening sky.
    Soon, the sun would disappear.

    Because the Earth was turning.
    Spinning to the east.
    Spinning into the night.
    As Australia spun into the day.

    The Earth is ever-spinning on its axis.
    (Like a top)

    And the Moon is spinning ’round the Earth.

    And the Earth is spinning ’round the Sun.

    And the Sun is slowly spinning ’round the Galactic Core.
    (Where the black hole lurks)

    And our Galaxy itself is slowly spinning towards Andromeda.

    And so, I took off running across the lawn.
    For if I’m always spinning-
    Why stand still?

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    Quote Originally Posted by publiusr View Post
    That was just in advance. I need to check the dates more often. Cholesterol.
    No, I kind of got that before I even logged on.

    "Oh wait. He kind of assumed that I would only see the reply when I got back, as I SHOULD be busy preparing now!" Which I wasn't. 'Cause I procrastinate.

    I recited my poem in front of the audience. It was very small; only a few extra people besides the class showed up. It wasn't in front of a microphone, and was a much more informal setting, just a larger classroom that felt more like a small insular cafe than a recital hall.

    It was damn cold when I went up to read it, so I was shivering a bit towards the middle. I suppose it made it sound like I was scared. I picked up some voice, but I sure didn't sound like the people that were using hip hop/Slam Poetry styles.

    Got back a bunch of assignments in one day. From the looks of it, I'm making straight A's in this class, so I can assume that my final grade will be an A. Woo!

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    Good job, SL!

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    Yes, congrats!

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    Thanks.

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    Here's the limit of my poetic talent:
    Code:
    Right after man walked on the moon
    There just had to be some buffoon
       Who'd sell books that deny it
       For the suckers who'll buy it.
    I don't suppose it will end soon.

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    Haha, I love limericks. That was great.

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